Awesome application Hellie; it was a very enjoyable read. The character is well thought out, very interesting and will be fun to RP with.
My only comment is that Dragonstone is very small and quite barren, so if Alyon held land on Dragonstone it was minor. Are you okay with that? Perhaps Alyon lived in the castle itself with Stannis and took Hallie to live there with him? It might require a small bit of a rethink on your part, but it is a very minor issue.
You're 99.99% there with an absolutely fantastic app - just address the land issue and you are in.
Post by Halaevia Baratheon on May 1, 2012 16:20:23 GMT
Thank you for reading over and reviewing the application - I'm glad you liked it!
I've made the suggested changes - Alyon and Hallie now lived in the castle rather than on separate lands somewhere. As discussed in the cbox, I added in a bit about Stannis asking Hallie back to Dragonstone, to give her a reason for that.
If there are any other alterations needed, please let me know!
